Reflection of Peers Paper
Your essay is very well written and you did a really good job at not using the traditional five paragraph essay format. You really did good at making your own ideas the key focus of your paper and only having the resources as supporting evidence to make your point even clearer. All that said I do have some suggestions for you to make your essay even better. Several times in your paper you go against your thesis and then you go with your thesis too. It was very confusing reading your essay on that aspect because you had conflicting feelings that went with your thesis and against it. Make sure you stick to one side of the argument or try to really make the reader understand what you are trying to say, I know we talked in class about how you felt the aspects of art should be included in science but you didn’t know how to write it in that fashion. If you make these corrections, I think your paper will be a solid piece to hand in to Elisha.
